IELTS Writing Task 2 essay with model answer

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic

Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.


Write at least 250 words.

Model Answer:

There has been an increasing debate as to whether children should be encouraged to participate in organised group activities or they should be free to choose their activities on their own in their free time. In this essay, I will shed some light on both the views and give my opinion.



To begin with, organised group activities allow children to socialize with people in their immediate vicinity. Children learn to interact with the people in their society. To illustrate this, one can organise picnic among familieswhich will give enough room for children to socialize. Additionally, children learn various team building activities like working in a group competing with their peers, coping up with pressure etc. Furthermore, children learn the right attitude from being in a group.

On the other hand, children should be independent in choosing their activities in their free time. This gives the freedom of thought and children learn to take up challenges and responsibilities. However, there is a possibility that certain children take up wrong routes. Due to technological advancements, children are more prone to playing video games, socializing themselves on the internet. This will detach them from their immediate social circle. Children can be given freedom of thought, but adult supervision is necessary to ensure that they do not take wrong path.

In conclusion, having considered both the views, I think an organised group activity is more beneficial for children. Children are the future of society and their nurturing can not be ignored.

Total Words: 280

Task Achievement: 7

Coherence & Cohesion: 7

Lexical resources: 7

Grammar: 7

Overall Score: Band 7

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  1. suli 5 years ago

    I do not see any examples given as asked in the question.

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