IELTS Writing Task 2 essay with model answer

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic

Some people believe the aim of university education is to help graduates get better jobs. Others believe there are much wider benefits of university education for both individuals and society.

Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.


Write at least 250 words.

Model Answer:

According to a section of society, the primary goal of tertiary education is to enable individuals secure coveted jobs. However others strongly believe that goal of higher education is to achieve greater good; both for individuals and society. I strongly believe that purpose of university education is far beyond job prospects and in the course of the essay I will discuss both the viewpoints.



There are specific reasons why people believe that tertiary education is the gateway to a lucrative job. Firstly market researches in the United States and other developed countries have shown that post graduates are able to command a considerable higher salary at workplace when compared to graduates or simple high school diploma holders. Moreover, the professional world of certain white collared, highly respected professions, like those of physicians, engineers, scientists can only be pursued, after graduating from the respective university courses. Furthermore, in certain fields like management, the credibility of various universities are judged by their ability to generate glittering well-paid employment offers for their fresh graduates, during their campus placements. Hence university education is definitely perceived as a means of better employability.

In this context it is worth mentioning that, apart from generating lucrative jobs for students, universities also benefit the nation by creating educated societies, containing an immense pool of forward thinking individuals, who can contribute towards social development by their respective expertise. Individuals graduating from universities also additionally benefit from the multicultural environments that promote intercultural tolerance and brotherhood. The process of tertiary education also promotes teamwork and collective development amongst individuals. Over and above, numerous long lasting friendships, business partnerships and courtships also bloom from the university campus life.

Finally, to sum up, it can be confidently stated that apart from generating respectable employment, there are numerous associated positive aspects of university education, which are of great social and individual significance.

Total Words: 277

Task Achievement: 9

Coherence & Cohesion: 9

Lexical resources: 9

Grammar: 9

Overall Score: Band 9

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10 Comments

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  1. aatika patel 6 years ago

    excellent essay..i appreciate u…..good vacabs also…thanks a lot

  2. Author
    IELTS Online Practice 6 years ago

    Dear Aatika,

    I’m glad you found it helpful.

    Good luck with IELTS!

    Atul.

  3. Kaiser 6 years ago

    Hi, first time replying here so hope you don’t mind it being conflictory: The original comment sounds almost sarcastic- in the 3rd paragraph you repeat the word ‘also’ in every sentence which doesn’t seem like good vocabulary. Also, (being ironic here) it seems that you weigh the two opinions in a fashion that contradicts your point; with better employability getting a main focus in comparison to wider benefits. Also, why is your final paragraph 35 words long?

    I think the vocabulary on the whole was good throughout, however I just found that these points stick out for me and seems like it would detract from your IELTs score. Can you explain why it would get a 9 even with my points in mind? I need to get an 8 but I’m finding it hard to find common ground on what is considered a good essay for Task 2 with someone who got an 8 in writing. He read the essay and saw 9 as well, which I think is too high after mulling over my niggling points.

  4. Gagandeep singh 6 years ago

    Excellent essay with amazing vocab

  5. Anonymous 5 years ago

    Pls send me good vocabulary list ..

  6. Author
    IELTS Online Practice 5 years ago

    Email me on hello@ieltsonlinepractice.com and I’ll send you a free ebook on grammar and vocabulary.

    Cheers,
    Atul.

  7. Anonymous 4 years ago

    so great ………

  8. Vikram Ajit Singh Kamboj 3 years ago

    Where can I find more essays like this

  9. Author
    IELTS Online Practice 3 years ago

    Dear Vikram,

    I’ve posted 100’s of model answers here:
    https://ieltsonlinepractice.com/ielts-writing-speaking-samples-band-7-8-9-students/

    Good luck!
    Atul.

  10. Vikram Ajit Singh Kamboj 3 years ago

    I have a lot of problem with writing task 2,pls help me

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