IELTS Writing Task 2 essay with model answer

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.


Model Answer:

Over the last half-century, there has been a dramatic increase in the number of vehicles. This has resulted in numerous traffic jams especially in the big cities and consequently, high levels of air pollution. Although, there are those who believe that increasing oil prices might help solve this problem. I am strongly inclined to believe that higher petrol prices will have serious drawbacks on our society.

Firstly, oil and gas play a fundamental role in the industry, since most of the heavy machinery used in different industries are operated by petrol. For example, a recent study conducted in Japan has revealed that the nearly 80% of all businesses are sensitive to the price of petrol. In addition, higher prices of petrol will indirectly influence the prices of the various goods in the market through increasing the cost of their transportation. Lastly, this will burden the people and limit their freedom to travel to enjoy their leisure time. Undoubtedly, the growth of oil and gas prices will create new problems.



On the other hand, there are some other ways to tackle traffic and pollutions problem in cities. To begin with, improving methods of public transportation as well as the increase in their availability everywhere around the clock, will significantly reduce the use of private cars. To illustrate, a recent study published in Canada has shown that the upward trend in the various means of public transportation such as buses and trains resulted in decrease the number of traffic jams and road accidents by around 25%. Moreover, the government should invest more on repairing and maintaining roads as well as constructing  new roads to solve the problem and traffic congestion. Furthermore, the scientists should search for the sources of clean energy such as solar power and nuclear power to replace the fossil fuel.

To sum up, it can be clearly seen that the cons of increasing petrol prices outweigh the pros hence I am strongly against the idea of increasing gasoline prices. Government and scientists can prevent the situation from further deterioration through new mobility solutions and innovation in renewable energy.

 

Total Words: 322

Task Achievement: 8

Coherence & Cohesion: 8

Lexical resources: 8

Grammar: 8

Overall Score: Band 8

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9 Comments
  1. Anonymous 2 years ago

    Which ielts test centre is going to give this essay 8 band score?????? ????????
    (6.5 optimisticly)

    • Author

      Why do you think so? What does the essay lack?

    • Anonymous 8 months ago

      anonymous can you please compose better than this?? if lets see. unless stop to insult others okay?

  2. Alex 1 year ago

    it is a nice essay,thanks for sharing

  3. Anonymous 1 year ago

    U must be joking.. ???? recent study in blah blah blah is not allowed in IELTS Writing. This essay will be definitely 5.5 since it is memorized

    • Author

      Where did you read that such examples are not allowed in IELTS?

      The band score descriptors say nothing about the kind of examples that are allowed/disallowed in IELTS. All you need to do to satisfy task achievement is to extend your arguments with supporting details and examples.

      Please stop spreading wrong information.

    • Anonymous 8 months ago

      i am now sure you still don’t know the format of ielts. we can give the recent examples as well as fabricated examples even work here.

  4. DEOVRAT 9 months ago

    n place of nuclear energy if you talked about battery operated electric cars would have been better.

  5. Sandhya 4 months ago

    Dear Mr. Anonymous, by looking at your very first comment we got to know that u just want to criticize the people and discourage the writer. The reason might be u were the competitor. This is eassy is good enough. Please provide the suggestions for improvising the essay. Don’t discourage people jus by rude comments.

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