Hi Atul ! We live in a world of technology these days . While the Internet brings with it clear advantages , the problems in terms of control and security of information outweigh the advantages .
To what extend do you agree ?
Here is my approach , even though very tough to depict how to analyse the question :
I was agree .
BP 1 : Admittedly , there are some basic advantages …..( I did use language of possibility ).
BP2 : Nevertheless , despite these minimal advantages , the Internet can be caused more serious issues . One obvious drawback can explained is …. This has a great risk ….Another reason why I believe online activities have more negative impacts is that … This a concern …
In conclusion , ( mention the reason for dis advantages ) far outweigh any benefits that could result from the Internet .
So I am not sure of the content of the structure and also I think I used the language of adv and disadvantage which is I do not know how I switched to an argumentative essay . Also I did use the language of probability in adv paragraph not in disadvantage .
So I need a great help In order to correctify and the above points, please ,as I have booked for further exam and I do not want keep going on my mistakes with out knowing the adequate answer .
Comments welcoming !

 

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