IELTS Writing Task 2 essay with model answer
You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic
Some people believe that we have too many choices these days. To what extent to you agree or disagree?
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Write at least 250 words.
Model Answer:
The revolutionary advancement in modern technology has endowed people with substantial resources for their survival in the best possible way. The availability of variety of facilities has enabled the people to choose inalienable beneficial opportunities to adopt in their lives. However, there are sections of society that cannot afford even basic necessities. For them these choices are out of reach, hence I partially agree with the view.
In the present era, human beings have exponentially increased the number of options to avail in different fields like food, transport and business due to many reasons. Firstly, the creative methods to produce variety of food and its preservation have benefitted human population with provision of significant types of edibles during the entire year. For instance, non-seasonals can be bought from the food market irrespective of the weather conditions due to modernized preservation methods. Secondly, while traveling, we can opt for many choices, according to affordability and convenience, due to inventions of faster ways of transportation leading to revolution in transport hubs. Furthermore, the advancement in education and development has endowed people with availability of enormous number of professional fields to succeed in their lives.
There are, however, unequal distribution of positive aspects of technology. Many underdeveloped countries are lacking the basic necessities to survive like food, health and financial resources. Instead of having choices, they do not have an option to avail the fundamental human rights. To illustrate, the research data by WHO shows that 45% of population does not have access to clean water supply; 35% people are spending a substandard life. Moreover, certain job and study courses are limited to developed countries only, leaving others devoid of these advantages.
In the light of the arguments I have hitherto considered, this conclusion is evident that, undoubtedly, people have access to many choices to enjoy in their lives but there is unequal distribution of beneficial resources. Everyone should have equal approach to all types of advantageous impacts of modern technology , and foremost, there should be provision of at least fundamental human rights.
Total Words: 300
Task Achievement: 8
Coherence & Cohesion: 8
Lexical resources: 8
Grammar: 8
Overall Score: Band 8
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I’ve uploaded my writing about this topic in Dropbox. could you examine that?
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I am a little confused. Why have you written about the distribution of the technology aspect and whether everyone is getting enough or no? As per me, the essay is asking about CHOICES and nothing about the “who gets what”. Please elaborate.
Dear Jeet,
You have a fair point.
Here’s how I look at it. The main topic of the question can be thought of as “do people have too many choices these days?”. If you think of it only from the perspective of someone who has a lot of money then you can say that there are too many choices in food, clothing, entertainment etc.
On the other hand, if you think about it from the perspective of someone who cannot afford even the basic needs, then those choices are out of reach.
So the writer partially agrees with the claim statement and provides those 2 perspectives in the body paragraphs.
Hope this helps.
Cheers,
Atul.
Well written essay together with all the necessary arguments have been given .
Thanks
According to some people, we have excess priorities.In my opinion that’s not a good thinking at all in most cases.However it is beneficial in some perspectives.
As backer of a brain of great capacity, man has a huge potential to do many things.So,it can be possible to show one’s genius in many sectors. Is it a piece pf cake? I don’t think so.
First of all, every individuals has an inate capacity of his own.Then, he can run that buy proper knowledge and practice. If he spend his energy in various sectors, it might have to be resulted in nothing.
For example, an athelet who spends his time in different sports such as running, weight lifting, high jump, long jump etc. won’t have performance in a satisfactory level in any sport. As every sport requires more or less individual training .
In the contrast, many people can’t realise what would better for him. Then he can give his initial efforts in different cases and after
some day he will find his own way.