IELTS Writing Task 2 essay with model answer

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic

Some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with. What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having a large number of toys?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.


Model Answer:

Children are fond of toys.As a result many parents buy lots of toys for their children. On one hand, toys can be a great tool for the child’s learning ;  but on the other, excessive fondness for toys can lessen a child’s social interaction and consequently under develop the child’s social skills. Over the course of this essay I will discuss both the pros and cons of using large number of toys on children.

There are several positive effects of abundant toys on the mental growth of a child. With advancement in medical science and technology, toys nowadays have become a medium of education as well as entertainment. Consequently parents buy a plethora of toys to aid the mental development of their children. In fact, in an experiment conducted by a group of American scientists, children were divided into two groups. One group were given a single toy for 2 weeks while the other was given one hundred toys for the same period. At the end of the experiment it was found that children with more toys outperformed their counterparts in analytical tasks. Therefore it is clear that more toys help in child’s mental growth.

However every coin has two sides.It is important for a child to socialise  during their formative years.This helps the child to be expressive and develop good communication skills. Large number of toys can make children addicted to them. This can lead to serious problems for children such as less interaction with other kids. As a result children can become socially awkward. Therefore it is abundantly clear that although toys are great for a child’s development, excessive use can  sometimes do more harm than good.

Through a wide range of arguments, I have clearly depicted the pros and cons of the effect of toys on children. On one hand it aids a child’s growth, while on the other excessive use can be harmful.

 



Total Words: 314

Task Achievement: 8

Coherence & Cohesion: 8

Lexical resources: 8

Grammar: 8

Overall Score: Band 8

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2 Comments
  1. Muhammad 2 years ago

    Hi there.

    A proper one.
    But, presumably; it has some drawbacks on the domain of punctuation.
    IMO, the above essay for General is permissible, it is medicor for Academic, though.

  2. cookiemonster 2 months ago

    First paragraph of main body does not respond the task as it does not answer the question about LARGE number of toys, and therefore, task response is not full.

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