IELTS Writing Task 2 essay with model answer

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic

Cities are getting big and overcrowded. Give some causes and suggest the solutions needed.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.


Model Answer:

Urban areas are increasingly expanding to cater to the needs of burgeoning population. This essay will shed light on some potential reasons for this, including education and work opportunities; and also highlight some possible solutions including establishment of higher academic institutes and industries in the countryside.

The most obvious reason for massive population migrating to cities is the availability of quality educational institutes and better job opportunities in cities. Because of the unavailability of medical and engineering colleges in rural areas, many young people are required to move to cities. Moreover, the desire to achieve a successful career encourages a drastic number of people to migrate to cities. A recent study conducted in India has shown that the percentage of people who have migrated to cities has gone up each year in the last decade. Therefore it goes without saying that cities are becoming overpopulated due to increased chances of study and work.



However, educational and industrial development in rural areas will dramatically decrease the number of people who want to migrate to urban areas. If the government makes an effort to make tertiary education available in villages, youngsters will no longer need to move to cities. In addition, there should be numerous industries around the countryside, which may provide enough job opportunities to the qualified living nearby. For example, recently Ford company has opened multiple branches near the rural areas which would definitely be advantageous to the rural population. Thus, it can be seen that the promising development in the countryside significantly reduces the movement of people to cities.

To recapitulate, this essay illustrated that cities have become overcrowded due to the availability of better educational facilities and countless job opportunities; Thus, if these facilities could be made available in rural areas the trend of people migrating to urban areas could be reduced to a great extent.

 

Total Words: 320

Task Achievement: 9

Coherence & Cohesion: 9

Lexical resources: 9

Grammar: 9

Overall Score: Band 9

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  1. Anonymous 6 years ago

    what a beautiful essay! Although its not easy to write precise and relevant essay, the above written essay depicts unambiguous, precise and seamless flow of ideas.

  2. Author
    IELTS Online Practice 6 years ago

    Thanks for the kind words.

    There were a few typos that I have fixed now.

    Hope you are going well with your IELTS preparation.

    Good luck!

    Cheers,
    Atul

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