IELTS Academic Writing Task 1 with model answer

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009.

 


Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 Words.

Model Answer:



The pie charts compare the main energy sources in two European countries, France and Germany, in 2009, with further detail provided regarding the use of renewable energy.

In 2009, Germany’s electricity generation was higher (560 Billion kWh) as compared to France (510 Billion kWh). The most striking feature is that France relied on nuclear power to supply 75% of its energy demands, while Germany relied mainly on conventional thermal energy, providing almost 60% of the electricity. Nuclear energy featured at only 23% in Germany.

Both countries used renewable energies to a similar extent in 2009, with France relying on green energy for 13.7% of its demands and Germany for 17.4%. However, the make-up of the renewable energy sector differed greatly between the two countries. While France relied mainly on hydroelectric energy (80.5%), Germany had a more diverse portfolio with biomass and wind providing almost equal proportions of energy (39.3% and 36.9% respectively), followed by hydroelectric at 17.7%. Solar power featured only minimally in both countries, with 6.1% and 0.9% of the renewable shares in Germany and France respectively.

To sum up, Germany generated more energy than France in 2009. Moreover,  the energy sources that Germany relied on were much more diverse than those in France.

Total Words: 184

Task Achievement: 8

Coherence & Cohesion: 8

Lexical resources: 8

Grammar: 8

Overall Score: Band 8

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